First Time Here....Be Nice - Page 17

EdgeVox · 04-08-2005, 04:01 PM

"I'm getting married"
Between the wine and tequila that detail fell through the cracks...

EdgeVox · 05-17-2005, 08:01 AM

Sedative Kiss
Coffee's ready
Off to the end of the day
Be back when you're feeling more alone
You didn't leave me with any fear
You haven't known any fear
You didn't have to go

EdgeVox · 06-10-2005, 10:31 PM

The smoke filled hallway
Hides your indifference
I know you would rather not be so goddamn blank
You're a sphinx
A tease
A goddess with the luxury of time
Time's on your clock
You're a madman waiting for his heart to incend
I can definitely empathize
Your heart is full of cynical wine
You'll bleed it out eventually
Tipsy on your own poker-faced beauty
Beautiful cyanide
I ache at your apathy
Phoenix on call
Kamikazee in the queue
Let me lead you astray
Pain is worth a damn
When you've got nothing at all...

For Honor · 06-12-2005, 08:40 PM

You write some good stuff, Edgevox

For Honor · 06-12-2005, 08:43 PM

"Sedative Kiss
Coffee's ready
Off to the end of the day
Be back when you're feeling more alone
You didn't leave me with any fear
You haven't known any fear
You didn't have to go"

That is great.
Especially because it is something I am having trouble doing--
being concise and letting the reader have a lot of interpretation....

I like it

ZeroDude · 06-13-2005, 12:27 PM

Beautiful cyanide
I ache at your apathy
Phoenix on call
Kamikazee in the queue
Let me lead you astray
Pain is worth a damn
When you've got nothing at all...

Brilliant work, I just love "Beautiful cyanide" those two words sum up the feelings and outlook of a person, amazing

For Honor · 06-13-2005, 07:27 PM

pain is worth a damn.....

hmm

I wonder hust what that means to you...

EdgeVox · 06-16-2005, 09:19 AM

The first raindrop falls
That's our cue
Moving with the swagger
Of a storm
No clarity today
I want to see hell
And I want you to go with me
We're both burning through the horizon
Nothing to lose
That's all we've got
I'm daring God to show me different
I'm cursing his name as the water engulfs me
Petulant in my begging for a moment of his time
My life has been one big tantrum
I'm convinced this is a bad idea
I'm having the time of my life
Wasted on fire
I want to see hell
At least its a destination
We're both familiar with..

EdgeVox · 06-28-2005, 11:48 PM

Take a walk
Down my rainsoaked apathy
My darling
My Sweet
My insecurity
You've never looked so lovely
You wear your indifference
Like nails from a cross
You're a victim
A patsy
Yet you've never looked so lovely
Cheers, love, to the flinching of a new world
Cheers, to God's disregard
I love you
I know it means nothing
Cheers, someone's bound to notice
Eventually....

For Honor · 06-30-2005, 12:09 AM

I like that last one.

I dislike it a lot. It's unfomfortable... but it strikes a chord at least....

EdgeVox · 08-18-2005, 03:41 PM

When the rain just won't quit
And the river reaches your feet
When the sun takes a dive
And eternal night sets in
When your eyes stop making sense
And see only in absolutes
When you feel that God is near
But you're not so eager still

Dry for a week now
The most expensive clarity
I've ever paid for
The lucid brown eyes
That used to haunt me at night
Now haunt me throughout the day
I miss me missing you
God it gave me gravity

wizard2c · 08-18-2005, 05:34 PM

Very good writing Edge Vox. I especially like:

"When your eyes stop making sense
And see only in absolutes"

Thanks for posting.....I'm a little World-weary right about now and reading your work helps clear my thinking.

carol
wizard2c

EdgeVox · 09-08-2005, 12:09 PM

The bittersweet street lights herald my arrival
As I embark on yet another random way to burn my youth
I can always taste the resentment on the lips of my peers
Why am I the only one who can still be born again
I feel like I'm daring God to do his worst
Honor thy father
It's about time you started to give a damn..

wizard2c · 09-08-2005, 09:29 PM

Glad you wrote EdgeVox..........good as usual......thanks,

carol
wizard2c

EdgeVox · 09-30-2005, 04:28 AM

Amphetamine smoke rings
4 am theology lessons
We couldn't leave well enough alone
Haven't talked to you in a year
I'm pretty sure you're getting by
There's a black crucifix staring me down
The only noise is a glass of whiskey
Struggling down my throat
There's no real moral here
The lesson is just getting by
The booze isn't filling me up anymore
The smoke isn't keeping me high
It's the most beautiful crash
Twisted intent and heartsick shrapnel
I'm wired and all too aware that I don't have you
You've been a very gracious victim
It's been educational
My life is over
Alas the sun is rising
The tide retreats
Tomorrow's another day
But not without leaving a mark
On you and me..

08-18-2005, 05:34 PM	#252
wizard2c Refugee Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Florida Posts: 1,580 Local Time: 06:29 PM	reply Very good writing Edge Vox. I especially like: "When your eyes stop making sense And see only in absolutes" Thanks for posting.....I'm a little World-weary right about now and reading your work helps clear my thinking. carol wizard2c

09-08-2005, 09:29 PM	#254
wizard2c Refugee Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Florida Posts: 1,580 Local Time: 06:29 PM	reply Glad you wrote EdgeVox..........good as usual......thanks, carol wizard2c

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04-08-2005, 04:01 PM	#241
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 795 Local Time: 12:29 PM	"I'm getting married" Between the wine and tequila that detail fell through the cracks...

05-17-2005, 08:01 AM	#242
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 795 Local Time: 12:29 PM	Sedative Kiss Coffee's ready Off to the end of the day Be back when you're feeling more alone You didn't leave me with any fear You haven't known any fear You didn't have to go

06-10-2005, 10:31 PM	#243
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 795 Local Time: 12:29 PM	The smoke filled hallway Hides your indifference I know you would rather not be so goddamn blank You're a sphinx A tease A goddess with the luxury of time Time's on your clock You're a madman waiting for his heart to incend I can definitely empathize Your heart is full of cynical wine You'll bleed it out eventually Tipsy on your own poker-faced beauty Beautiful cyanide I ache at your apathy Phoenix on call Kamikazee in the queue Let me lead you astray Pain is worth a damn When you've got nothing at all...

06-12-2005, 08:40 PM	#244
For Honor Rock n' Roll Doggie VIP PASS Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: East Coast, USA Posts: 5,628 Local Time: 01:29 PM	You write some good stuff, Edgevox

06-12-2005, 08:43 PM	#245
For Honor Rock n' Roll Doggie VIP PASS Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: East Coast, USA Posts: 5,628 Local Time: 01:29 PM	"Sedative Kiss Coffee's ready Off to the end of the day Be back when you're feeling more alone You didn't leave me with any fear You haven't known any fear You didn't have to go" That is great. Especially because it is something I am having trouble doing-- being concise and letting the reader have a lot of interpretation.... I like it

06-13-2005, 12:27 PM	#246
ZeroDude Rock n' Roll Doggie Band-aid Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Belfast Posts: 4,939 Local Time: 06:29 PM	Beautiful cyanide I ache at your apathy Phoenix on call Kamikazee in the queue Let me lead you astray Pain is worth a damn When you've got nothing at all... Brilliant work, I just love "Beautiful cyanide" those two words sum up the feelings and outlook of a person, amazing

06-13-2005, 07:27 PM	#247
For Honor Rock n' Roll Doggie VIP PASS Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: East Coast, USA Posts: 5,628 Local Time: 01:29 PM	pain is worth a damn..... hmm I wonder hust what that means to you...

06-16-2005, 09:19 AM	#248
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 795 Local Time: 12:29 PM	The first raindrop falls That's our cue Moving with the swagger Of a storm No clarity today I want to see hell And I want you to go with me We're both burning through the horizon Nothing to lose That's all we've got I'm daring God to show me different I'm cursing his name as the water engulfs me Petulant in my begging for a moment of his time My life has been one big tantrum I'm convinced this is a bad idea I'm having the time of my life Wasted on fire I want to see hell At least its a destination We're both familiar with..

06-28-2005, 11:48 PM	#249
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 795 Local Time: 12:29 PM	Take a walk Down my rainsoaked apathy My darling My Sweet My insecurity You've never looked so lovely You wear your indifference Like nails from a cross You're a victim A patsy Yet you've never looked so lovely Cheers, love, to the flinching of a new world Cheers, to God's disregard I love you I know it means nothing Cheers, someone's bound to notice Eventually....

06-30-2005, 12:09 AM	#250
For Honor Rock n' Roll Doggie VIP PASS Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: East Coast, USA Posts: 5,628 Local Time: 01:29 PM	I like that last one. I dislike it a lot. It's unfomfortable... but it strikes a chord at least....

08-18-2005, 03:41 PM	#251
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 795 Local Time: 12:29 PM	When the rain just won't quit And the river reaches your feet When the sun takes a dive And eternal night sets in When your eyes stop making sense And see only in absolutes When you feel that God is near But you're not so eager still Dry for a week now The most expensive clarity I've ever paid for The lucid brown eyes That used to haunt me at night Now haunt me throughout the day I miss me missing you God it gave me gravity

09-08-2005, 12:09 PM	#253
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 795 Local Time: 12:29 PM	The bittersweet street lights herald my arrival As I embark on yet another random way to burn my youth I can always taste the resentment on the lips of my peers Why am I the only one who can still be born again I feel like I'm daring God to do his worst Honor thy father It's about time you started to give a damn..

09-30-2005, 04:28 AM	#255
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 795 Local Time: 12:29 PM	Amphetamine smoke rings 4 am theology lessons We couldn't leave well enough alone Haven't talked to you in a year I'm pretty sure you're getting by There's a black crucifix staring me down The only noise is a glass of whiskey Struggling down my throat There's no real moral here The lesson is just getting by The booze isn't filling me up anymore The smoke isn't keeping me high It's the most beautiful crash Twisted intent and heartsick shrapnel I'm wired and all too aware that I don't have you You've been a very gracious victim It's been educational My life is over Alas the sun is rising The tide retreats Tomorrow's another day But not without leaving a mark On you and me..